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这是帮我一个IB体系下的同学改的作文哈 我本人不学IB 所以不确定具体的评分细则是什么
我是按照ACT阅读的修改题的要求来进行proofread的 欢迎大佬进行指正
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Everyone has a dream, and mine is to become an excellent dentist. I hope to live in a peceful place where I can enjoy peaceful moments. In my free time, I want to go to the seaside sit by the ocean, and read books. But more importantly, I want to use my skills to help people. My interest in dentistry started because of my own experiences. When I was a child, I loved eating sweets. which led to serious dental problems. I had to visit the dentist many times and spent a lot d money on treatment.
However, some of the dentists I visited were not skilled and instead of fixing my teeth, they made my pain worser. I realized that many people in society might have similar experiences. Some may suffer from bad dental care, while others may not be able to afford it.
Another reason I want to be an dentist is that I want to help people in need. Good teeth are very important for people's health. My grandma has serious dental problems, and then after spending a lot of money on treatments, her condition didn't improve. Because of her bad teeth, she can't eat many foods, which affects her nutrition and health. This made me realize how important it is to have access to good dental care. In the future, I want to do volunteer work in poor areas if I have opportunity, helping people who can't afford proper treatment. To achieve my dream,
I'll study hard and gain the skills needed to become a great dentist.
Maybe someday. I can make a real difference in people's lives and see their smile with confidence.
Finally, I want to say "Be the change that you wish to see in the world."

算是这个站上发的第一份博客了哈哈哈哈
已经初三了,家里又那么大变故,得开始卷喽
昨天晚上跨年,开始整理资料,正好隔壁邻居开始放鞭炮,太兴奋了,抓起相机还没顾着穿羽绒服就冲出去了